Hariya
was lying motionless on the road. Blood was dripping from his forehead and had
spread itself into a small pond around him. His air supply was cut off by the
herd of people who were witnessing their daily spectacle. His eyes were fading
and his mind was slipping into oblivion. There was one last image that swept
through his eyes. He saw his ailing mother in the hospital bed waiting for her
son to return with money in time for her operation. He wanted to tell her that
everything will be fine and life would be as before. He felt someone lift him
and carry him somewhere. Then he saw the streets, the crowds, the lights, the
shops, all moving against him at a frantic pace. He tried to look up and
through the corner of his eye he saw the face of a man looking down at him with
compassion.
It
was Manilal’s last day. He had been waiting for this day for over a year. He
had served this office as a loyal watchman for 10 years. He was very grateful
to his master, Kamal Babu who had given him the job almost instantaneously. He
had just returned after serving the Army (first British, then Indian) for 25
years, but still served his new master with the same dedication. He guarded the
office like it was his own house. Everyone in the office was fond of him. He
used to tell them tales of war and his fascinating adventures during lunch
time. Often times, even Kamal Babu would listen in. The story everyone liked
the most was that epic tale wherein Manilal’s father had made sure that their
ancestral gold watch made its way to Manilal. His father was killed in battle
but his friend had staged a heroic escape and had come all the way to give
Manilal the ancestral watch. Manilal claimed that it was not his watch he got
that day: it was his destiny that was handed over to him!
Manilal
started with 25 rupees a month and had put most of it in his office provident
fund. With his army savings, he had married off his only daughter to a
post-master and she was leading a happy life in the neighboring village.
Manilal intended to spend his retirement life peacefully with his wife Parul.
He was planning to use part of his savings to get a sewing machine for her as
she was very passionate about stitching and knitting. With the rest of his
savings, he would go on a long pilgrimage trip with her. He had decided on the
list of places they would visit, and even their exact order. With a heavy
heart, he went into Kamal Babu’s room and delivered one last salute. Kamal Babu
came to him and gave him a tight hug.
“Manilal...
you have been a loyal and sincere watchman. And a wonderful friend to all of
us. We will all miss you and your stories! Anyways... here is a reward for your
hard work. Your provident fund money of 4000 rupees and an extra 1000 as a
token of appreciation from our side! We will also give you a pension of 15
rupees per month.” His eyes were wet.
“I
will miss you very much Sahib. This has been like my home. Thank you so much
Sahib. You are very kind. I will come every month to see you all.” He bid
goodbye to all his office friends and after one long final look at his chair,
left the place and people, happy and sad, light and heavy. On his way back home, after every 5 paces, he
stopped and felt his 5000 rupees with a sense of pride and excitement. His mind
brooded over everything he was going to do with it and he would press the
rewind button to relive his dream one last time again. Then his eyes fell on a
kulfi vendor and he felt the sudden urge to indulge himself. He ordered 2
kulfis and took his time to savor them slowly. It was bliss!
Manilal
had found a slip in Hariya’s shirt pocket which had a prescription for Nirmala
and had the name Grand
Hospital on it. Manilal
had immediately rushed Hariya to a rickshaw wala and had instructed him to get
to that hospital as soon as he can. Manilal had seen blood so many times in his
life and knew how to handle the situation. He slowly wiped all the blood from
Hariya’s face while constantly caressing the back of his head. He then browsed the contents of Hariya’s big
purse to see if he could find more details about the man. Suddenly his eyes lit
up as he saw lots of currency notes; 6000 rupees to be precise. Greed and his
own misfortune put an ugly thought in his mind and he vehemently tried to fight
it off. All the principles and virtues that had shaped his life so far seemed
to be at stake! Can he tell his wife that he was so engrossed in the divine
taste of a kulfi that he didn’t see or feel some crook cut his hand bag and
slip away with the small packet which had his lifetime savings? Or should he cash
in on this God given stroke of luck in the form of an injured helpless man? After
much deliberation, he took 5000 rupees from Hariya’s purse and slipped it into
his pocket.
A
train of thoughts and emotions were hustling inside Manilal. Should he leave
before the man wakes up and finds out everything? Was he so stone-hearted that
he will leave the man without even knowing whether he will live or not? The
doctor came out to put an end to his agony. “You brought him in time. He is out
of danger now. He has lost lot of blood. He is still unconscious. You can go in
and take a look.”
“No
doctor. I am happy he is alive. I should take leave now.” Manilal started
walking away tentatively when the doctor stopped him. “You should at least see
his old mother who would want to thank you for saving her son’s life!” Saying
so, the doctor dragged him to another ward where Hariya’s mother was laying
half-unconscious. On hearing that Manilal saved her son’s life, her face gave
out an emotion of gratitude and she folded her hands in a gesture that half
broke Manilal’s heart. He gave her an awkward smile and walked out with the
doctor.
“Fate!
It is a cruel animal. You see, Hariya went out to get the money for her
operation. Now see what has happened. I hope she will last to see him one last
time. Sometimes I hate my profession!” The doctor gave out a helpless sigh. Manilal’s
conscience punctured his heart and his guilt stifled him.
“How
much for her operation?” Manilal asked hesitantly. “7500 rupees!” The doctor
looked at Manilal hopefully.
Manilal
thought for a while. He handed over 6000 rupees to the doctor. “Take this money
and start the operation. I will soon be back with the rest of the money!” The
doctor’s face was choked with pride for this selfless man and he fled to make
arrangements for the operation. Manilal looked at his ancestral watch. Having
lost the earnings of his lifetime and soon to be deprived of his only prized
possession, Manilal walked out of the hospital feeling richer and prouder than
ever!
Hariya
was born into a family that was replete with misery and poverty. His father had
died early leaving Hariya and his mother with a lot of debt as heritage. Her
mother worked in neighbors’ houses to make ends meet and sold her kidney to pay
off the debt and send him to school. Hariya grew up to be an educated,
knowledgeable yet unemployed youth. His mother’s hardships forced him to take
up a job as a server in a hotel. Just when it looked like his mother could put
her miseries behind and rest at home, her other kidney failed. Perched at the
local tea shop, he had thought in vain about every single possible option to
raise the money for his mother’s operation while puffing out 10 cigarettes in
the process. That was when he saw Manilal come out of his office and noticed
him stroke his bag every other minute as if he was guarding a fortune!
....A SHORT STORY BY RAJ!
OH MY GOD!!!!!!! what a twist!!
ReplyDeletei thought the point where u described the watch gave a feeling that he might part with it & then the para where he goes out saying i'll bring the money is where the story would end
and then you give this whole new angle to it
a story that shows that most of us are 'inherently' good but circumstances make us do things we wouldn't normally do! both Hariya & Manilal touched my heart
Thank you so much Sujatha. :) Am so glad you liked it. That was a very neat synopsis. That inherent theme of "people are broken by circumstances" was the key thought in my mind which led to writing this story. :)
Deleteoh forgot to say: i actually wondered why you started a new last para about Hariya's poverty. i was like,"didn't the story end in the previous line?!!"
ReplyDelete:) yeah.. that was kind of "the epilogue". ;) Actually I was trying a slightly different writing style and was playing with the placement of that part and decided that the end would be the best place to put it. I could think of 2 more places where it would have fit in. I hope it was not too confusing. :(
DeleteWhew what a twist! How manipulative the mind can be! Interesting. Looking for more.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Krupaa. Am so happy you liked it. :) Yeah.. very true.. circumstances can force humans to behave in ways they would not have imagined.
DeleteSeriously, what a twist. It was an emotional read first. Great writing Raj:)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Saru. :) Am so happy you liked the story. :)
DeleteGood work Raj :)
ReplyDeleteInteresting read ...
Thank you Deepak. Glad you found it interesting bro. :)
DeleteThat was just mind blowing Raj.. I have always loved reading fiction and your post has made me love it even more.. I think u have to give a try in writing a book.. It ll definitely be a Bestseller.. :) Keep Writing :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for the lovely compliment Sonia. Made my day. :) I would love to write a book and have plans to do that. Thank you for the wonderful encouragement. Really means a lot. :)
DeleteAwww.. Glad to know that:) Will be waiting for that day and will be d 1st one to buy d 1st copy of ur book :) But condition is u shouldn't forget to mention my name in dedication section of ur book ;-). LOL.. Just Kidding.. Good Luck to you Raj :-)
Delete:) Thank you soooo much. And your condition is agreed to as well .. :) :)
DeleteLovely read. Thank God Minilal gave the money.
ReplyDeleteI loved the story :)
Thank you so much PhilO. Am so glad you loved the story. :)
DeleteYou're most welcome :) Looking forward to more of your work :)
DeleteAwesome story.
ReplyDeleteLoved it. :)
Thank you so much Aswini. :) Am so glad you liked it. And sorry for a slightly confusing narrative.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Vinay. :) Am very happy you loved the story. :)
ReplyDeleteAn emotional read!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Rahul. Glad you liked it. :)
Deletethat was a nice twist to a lovely story!! loved it..
ReplyDeleteThank you so much. I am so happy you loved the story. :)
DeleteWOW! What a compelling writing, very different style of story-telling. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteA touching story. A nice message, "People are not born bad but the circumstances make them so". :)
Thank you so much Akshay. I am so glad you liked the story and the style. :)
Deletewonderful story... completely agree with sujatha... only a little number of people in this world are evil, the others are forced to do bad things...
ReplyDeleteA very warm welcome to you here Muhammad. Thank you so much and glad that you liked the story. :) Totally agree.. not many people want to do bad things, they just end up doing them under various compulsions. :)
DeleteOh my goodness- this was indeed a story with a GREAT twist at the end!!!!!!! My head is just shaking because the story had so many twists and turns and just when you think- oh how great of Manilal to give back the money and sacrifice even his precious watch- THEN you find out that Hariya actually had taken Manilal's original money- oh my my my!!!
ReplyDeleteI beg to differ with one of the comments.... 'others are forced to do bad things'- as I think it is each of our choices- it was Hariya's choice it was Manilal's choice, and you see despite it looking like he was forced to do bad- in the end he chose to do good and do a selfless act.
Thank you so much Connie for the lovely comments. They really made my day. :) Your point is absolutely right and reflects the core element of the story. Under testing circumstances, everyone is presented with a choice. What he/she chooses to do makes the person ordinary or great. :)
DeleteWonderful story! Many a times it so happens with us as well just like both the characters in the story had happend. Money could be so tempting and make us turn bad according to the situations, but if the goodness inside us is more stronger than at the end just like Manilal we would choose the right thing for us.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Elivrah. I am so glad you liked the story. Yes, the goodness inside.. that guides us through the toughest of times. :)
DeleteRaj - thoroughly enjoyed reading it .. I am nominating you for the versatile blogger award. Do have a look at my blog for the rules
ReplyDeleteCheers,
Sangeeeta
Thank you soo much Sangeeta. I am really humbled it is a privilege. Thank you soo much. :)
Deletesuper story Raj, and those who reading this story surely it will make impact at least five minutes thanks for sharing.......
ReplyDeleteSuperb twists and turns loved it!
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